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Broken Pieces by ~Keykey:iconKeykey:

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The broken pieces do remind
Like something slipping out of time
And I'll piece them back together again
But they never look quite right
©2007-2009 ~Keykey
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Yes, this is supposed to be short, and seem cut off, like a single thought. n_n;
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~Felidire:iconFelidire: Nov 30, 2007, 11:34:19 PM
Hey that's awesome, I like um...
it's the way the last sentence just 'cuts short'
..like that, I dunno... =S

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Inhale the light, relax for some time;
the world outside stays numb tonight.
Free your mind, express the forgotten.
The world inside is yours tonight..

Espeon Umbreon Fanclub.
~Keykey:iconKeykey: Dec 1, 2007, 11:15:23 PM
I know. It's neat, isn't it? xD

I thought of it when I was in the shower. ._.;

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† R.I.P. Herbie - 4:15 PM, 11/04/05 †

And while everything seems to be going under
I just want it to all be the same
~Felidire:iconFelidire: Dec 1, 2007, 11:57:23 PM
why d'nt you write songs and (c) them and give them to hot-shot singers and make moneys

aaah, shower ~><
~♥

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Inhale the light, relax for some time;
the world outside stays numb tonight.
Free your mind, express the forgotten.
The world inside is yours tonight..

Espeon Umbreon Fanclub.
~Keykey:iconKeykey: Dec 2, 2007, 3:06:34 AM
So that by the time I'm old enough to become a hot-shot singer, I'll have tones of shit to play. And if that fails, I can always pawn off my work. xD

Yes, shower. Nice and warm, and I made sure to scrub behind my ears. <3

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† R.I.P. Herbie - 4:15 PM, 11/04/05 †

And while everything seems to be going under
I just want it to all be the same
~Felidire:iconFelidire: Dec 2, 2007, 4:12:07 AM
and other places.

I want to sing hot-shotly

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Inhale the light, relax for some time;
the world outside stays numb tonight.
Free your mind, express the forgotten.
The world inside is yours tonight..

Espeon Umbreon Fanclub.
~Lyndsey-A:iconLyndsey-A: Dec 28, 2007, 7:58:19 AM
this is really good I like it
~Keykey:iconKeykey: Dec 28, 2007, 4:15:16 PM
Thanks. <3

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† R.I.P. Herbie - 4:15 PM, 11/04/05 †

And while everything seems to be going under
I just want it to all be the same
~Disastercake:iconDisastercake: Dec 28, 2007, 10:44:19 PM
This is excellent. You've portrayed a complicated emotion/situation and conveyed so much in just a stanza.

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~Allie :frail:

Poetry is best when written in fits of raw emotion and near insanity. -Self

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~Keykey:iconKeykey: Dec 29, 2007, 1:02:04 AM
Thanks. Egh, it didn't really form out all that good into an entire song/poem or whatev, but that's probably because I didn't write it at the right time.. Hrm..

Anyways, comments like that are always appreciated. xD

<3

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† R.I.P. Herbie - 4:15 PM, 11/04/05 †

And while everything seems to be going under
I just want it to all be the same
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